Frank: At times you use too much adverb and adjectives and bog down the piece. At other times the description is astounding "An overshadowing engulfment of swarming, drones orbiting, florid tones, storing gold, pollinating - orchid bulbs with dusted resin". I enjoy your writing tremendously and I know you won't change your style, which is not what I'm suggesting. But a poignant Frank would be even more lethal, than an overbearing Frank. Still the piece was great.
Razah: You know I enjoy your writing, it is concise, emotionally impactful, and has great wording and flow. Sometimes you suffer from the opposite of Frank, it is too short or simple and leaves the reader wanting more. In this case, it is not that it is short, but I just didn't really click with it. The angle just wasn't impactful, and some of the rhymes were kind of simplistic especially when compared to Frank's.
Vote: Frank
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