Frank – fucckkkk this was crazy, to go off the title (multies) and stay relevant is always a tough task in my eyes, u make it seem effortless. This style must come natural to you, bravo! Most of this is an easy read, flows smooth at times. Widely descriptive. Dope piece, it’ll be hard to top!
Raz – I like your style, it was executed nicely here. The title of each verse doesn’t correlate imo. I expected a twist of sorts, to be describing something (second verse) over and over and have stop on that, kinda stopped any momentum I feel.
Ending with profound lines is your signature/ strong point but ive seen better (ending lines) from you. For some reason I cant get ‘eternal flame’ out my head =D
I liked reading both pieces in fairness, frank’s verse stuck to the topic better and was more comprehendible overall, he gets my vote here!
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