Frank
This was really good. There were a few places as usual where the flow wasn't perfect to me, but it was pretty damn good. It was an easy read for me, had some instrumentals playing in the background. I like how you took the literal honey approach and spun it with venom and tied it all together, it worked really nice imo. Your descriptions were on point, they pushed your concept in the right way at the right time, and by the end it felt complete but not overdone. There were several parts I thought were nice, the one that really stood out was the couplet about the antenna's and centipede legs, it flowed real nice when I read it to the beat and had a nice bounce to it.
Razah
I dunno man, this didn't feel like your usual work. It wasn't bad, but it felt like you weren't into it tbh. I know you were hoping to have some time off before the playoffs started, so maybe that factored into it. Wasn't really feeling the repetitive use of rhyme in the first part, in the second part i felt like it worked fine. I didn't really see how the second verse was 'venom' though compared to the first being 'honey'. Maybe I'm missing something obvious, but it almost seems like your first verse is more venomous and your second one is more sweet (honey-like). If there's a purpose to that juxtaposition sorry man I don't get it.
Thought this would be closer tbh but I feel like Frank takes this rather handidly.
v/ Frank
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