[Adonis]

2k - I liked the concept, and that closing line was pertinent. The problem though, is the metaphors and line concepts were rather weak. You decided not to go with heavy imagery or detail and instead went with these 'word plays' that were rather remedial. Still, you get cool points for executing a fairly dope concept rather well.


Buddha - Deep shit man, this is classic buddha, jam packed with info, I love it. You seem a tad rusty, but this verse is lovely none the less. You def covered some ground though man. This was a small glimpse in how your brain works, it was a bit like 2k too in all honesty. The way you jumped from thought to thought, far more coherent then his verses, but in the same vain.


v/Buddha

better mechanics and more captivating, pretty damn close though in all honesty.