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UnbornBuddha · 06-02-2016, 03:05 AM

Adonis: "viridescent" I like the word. Anywho, this was a romantic cosmic tale. It had elements of love, of lost, of hope, of hopelessness. It was good. There was a similar vibe to the move interstellar. Human extinction is an interesting thing to ponder. I'm a sucker for this kind of things, as long as there are done in a good way.

Mr J: As others said this flowed well, but the substance was never really fleshed out in a way that awe-inspiring. Which some J pieces do leave you with that kind of feeling. I'm sure you are a bit weary from competing even if you don't admit it to yourself. Props on competing every week it seems. I thought the rhymes of one path and tub man were bad to tell you the truth. I think this was keyed, it had elements of written J versus free-stream consciousness J, but your heart wasn't fully in it.

Vote: Adonis

Nice work both you guys though.

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UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	Adonis: "viridescent" I like the word. Anywho, this was a romantic cosmic tale. It had elements of love, of lost, of hope, of hopelessness. It was good. There was a similar vibe to the move interstellar. Human extinction is an interesting thing to ponder. I'm a sucker for this kind of things, as long as there are done in a good way. Mr J: As others said this flowed well, but the substance was never really fleshed out in a way that awe-inspiring. Which some J pieces do leave you with that kind of feeling. I'm sure you are a bit weary from competing even if you don't admit it to yourself. Props on competing every week it seems. I thought the rhymes of one path and tub man were bad to tell you the truth. I think this was keyed, it had elements of written J versus free-stream consciousness J, but your heart wasn't fully in it. Vote: Adonis Nice work both you guys though. Last edited by UnbornBuddha; 06-02-2016 at 03:32 AM.