I felt like the alliteration in Timeless' verse was unnecessary. Felt out of place, to be honest. Also, short verse. Doesn't seem like a full thought.
Closer was weird. I was feeling the rhyme scheme in the previous 3 bars before the closer.
Artifice, same thing. Saw you posted that you just threw this together, and mentioned if Frank showed he would body that. I, agree with you. At least you showed though. Anyways, cool verse I guess. This quick verse of yours gave me a glimpse into how you write your stuff, just the way you flip ideas.
Oh, and if I had to vote on somebody, (Shouldn't the thread be changed to 'open for feed'?), it would be artifice.
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