Adonis- you really, truly went all out this week. Damn bro. great to see this fully developed piece, I know I’m already in for a treat.. continuing reading. The astronauts line had me wondering what you were getting at. Then the second stanza started.. kinda dry bruh honestly. Need more imagery. Your story line was proper and well thought out but the execution truly lacked your usual flair. I really liked your story but dude you need to take advantage of full syllable counts to go against a dude like J. real talk. Pretty sure he’s gonna /v this. My bad. Real recognize real. I was totally into this but you did not flesh it out well imho. GREAT FUCKING CONCEPT. Not enough execution, sir. Really. I say that with love. Put more of yourself into your next piece. I didn’t feel this at all after I finished it. And I liked the beginning.
Realest review you’ll probably get. Peace.
Mr. J – your story moved forward effortlessly, I liked that. But there wasn’t anything exciting happening really. Continuing through the half and forward.. this entire piece had some cool mechanics but the story never really amounted to shit. There was no crux, no .. great point. I mean this was a decent drop. Yeah, the story flowed from beginning to end. I can’t say you did bad. I mean, comparatively. But you really were not in it this week J. I can tell man. Psyche yourself up. Get excited to create something. I need that old J back. I see you man. Get at me.
MVGT Adonis this week. He did more with his concept, I was more immersed in his then his opponents. Both got me into their angle but.. I wasn’t thoroughly left satisfied with either. But Adonis definitely had the more well rounded execution, and for that.. I give him the /v this week. Great work from both I’m just being overly critical because this was an extremely hard battle to vote on. Respect.
|