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Old 05-30-2016, 09:55 PM   #3
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Thanks for sharing this Geno. Your writer's voice shines through well because of the elements of honesty and tenets of your personal life being brought to light. My favorite bar was this one:

shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death
older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth
^The rhyme scheme was notable here, nice acceleration.

I've felt emptiness and solitude recently too so I could identify with this. It was a good venting piece. Keep writing.
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