3pa your verse had many good points I enjoyed the rhythm, and it had a feeling of hypnosis to it- slowly progressing into oblivion. I also think you bested Adonis mechanically.
Adonis: There were some standstills and there some platitudes and cliche imageries, Hanzo sword, for example. However, what made your piece was the story. It was humorous and imaginative, something along the minds of Pixar.
Vote: Adonis, he crafted a more interesting world/ narrative.
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