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Old 05-26-2016, 07:41 PM   #7
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Cool read here Frank, definitely developed a story here. Done in your typical style. My only gripe (and it's personal) is that there's been so many rhymes with the 'tion' syllable rhyme it's hard to make them standout anymore. Still impressive, but would've liked to see you tackle a less comfortable syllable set to rhyme.
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