[Mr. J]

Art, I enjoyed the piece up until bright & intense
it just sounds funny to me & didn't work with picket fence
regardless I thought the imagine it/avarice rhyme was cool
the rest of it begins to make sense by the time you're through
the emotion has more impact on a second read for me.
in the end though you weave quite an incredible story.
a few slip ups here & there but you make up for it by the end
nice work my friend.

Razah, this was really well done, perhaps my favorite of yours
the way you craft your flow basically allows it to take its course.
once you get into the mold you start to weave a nice ending in.
also a more original take on flipping your topic & blending it in.
I cant really find much to complain about...


v/Razah, I thought he came correct this time around.
he had a cohesive piece & put some nice rhyming down.
hardly a hiccup when I got finished, the story was well done
about halfway through Arts piece it almost felt rushed...
I cant get the picket fence out of my head cause it came after a good line.
otherwise I felt if he chopped that are made it work with another line...idk
maybe he would have fared better..
dope battle either way...