[Mr. J]

3PA, I thought this was an interesting tale
really enjoyed the whole metaphysical veil.
the twist at the end as well, the flows on point
perfect length while creating something Id enjoy.
the reason-less ghost section was smooth shit
very well done, it brought some amusement.

Don, I thought this was one of your best.
the first run at this was impressive, it garnered interest.
& upon a second read the twist comes into play
you had a couple stumbles, the Hanzo reference is great
the description played well in your hands.
some nice work here though big man..

v/This is a tough battle to vote on for me
both writers created a cool & interesting story
3PA took it in an abstract route with cool flow
Adonis wrote it in starting off on a smooth note
there didnt seem to be anything bumpy in either piece.
but I do feel Adonis came through & beasted...
the build up to the end was cool & you added some nice imagery.
you stayed consistent & played with some metaphors within the piece
its hard seeing anything bad to say about either piece
Adonis stumbled but at the end it didnt make a difference to me
I got Adonis taking this one