this was nice.. did you drop this in the league?
the transitions were smooth & really clean.
prey to succumb felt a tad wordy to work well
but you pull it off with how your wording helped
if that makes sense...either way this was nice
jaded vision could have worked that was sumn I liked..
nice work either way man...keep it up
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