View Single Post
Old 05-22-2016, 02:12 AM   #7
Mr. J
The Clown Prince
 
Mr. J's Avatar
 
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,046
Battle Record: 35-45


Champed
- Art of Writing League

Rep Power: 59349682
Mr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant future
Default

lold at that first line but your lines smooth
like the others said this needs a beat to rhyme to.
I read this in Ludas voice & it blew my mind dude.
could have dropped punchlines & the 4th line too
otherwise I think you bring potential to the board
keep it up brah....welcome....aboard?
__________________
.....laugh....and the world laughs with you
Mr. J is offline   Reply With Quote