first part: I really like your style tbf, its fast paced rhyming n story telling , flow was maintained, I'd prefer more internal multies but I understand that's hard to perfect.
But sticking to the topic throughout is key imo and that's what you've done here!
second part: your rhyming pace slowed down a lot. I believe at this point, you were dedicated to the story, so I understand it completely...
ending fell a bit flat if im honest but overall, I enjoyed the read man, good work!
I can only picture a reservoir dogs scene when reading this lol
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