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Razah, Brief synapses with a overtly refractory glimpse into the 16bar snapshot of brevity. Twas' a more encompassing excerpt, less gimmicky than you can sometimes be. 16 lines is for the incompetent reader and is a product of laziest, espesically for someone who claims to type over 100 wpm. Shame on you wasting such typing potential. Put those vibrant fingers to the test and write 48 lines nigga. Anything over 20 really. I am just bias against this shallow form of expressing oneself. 16 bars isn't the custom, nor is it cool in the gang. Time to expand your boundaries and step out of your comfort zone. I will not cast a vote for a 16 bar verse unless it is exceptionally short, with cut to the chase commas and less is more metaphorical overview. As it stands, this vote is about the same word count as your verse. Lol. Looking back, I did like
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Until I dreamt of death when I slept to lunacy's lullaby
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Timeless, Dope shit last week, Mordacyi. You are probably penning your best work as of late. About time. That 1-0 start was no fluke. You got the gusto. Very abstract writing. Lots of quotables
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Bear trap snaps echo the hallways of the wounded mind.
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Measure eyes for focus, golden iris with no sight in private.
Token pirates treasure stolen sidekicks, hold tight on my ship.
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Well done. Season is far from over, but at this current space in time I would give you the Nod for Most Improved Writer. Joy watching you evolve.
Decision. It is a competition of depiction. I couldn't sense a definitive correlation to the topic from timeless, though he had better verse, imo.
MVGT- Razah.