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Old 05-19-2016, 01:48 PM   #8
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Both pieces were dope first of all.
Razah, your verse wasn't too complex but it didn't have to be, way to stick to your topic though out and for giving us all a nice clear picture all the way through and through, honestly your piece reminds me of a verse I'd write myself, it seemed very suitable for audio too. I enjoyed it throughly.

Time, I digg your verses my dude. I think you were a little too ambitious on this one and it never really came to fruition, it wasn't bad though but I think the wording hurt you and made it read quite weird sometimes, the monocle line sticks out as an example of that. I love your imagery though, that wind talks in a sour tone line to start was nice.

Overall I'll go with the consensus and pick Razah, he had as more clear cut product and nice tone and flow throughout

V/Razah
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