I thought both pieces were good in their own way. Razah went more reader friendly mostly because of his approach. Timeless had noteworthy lines and for the most part flowed well and as others said abstract. I didn't really see a linearity to Timeless approach, however I did noticed a pattern. Each line was like a series of images or events where things were awry and crumbled, there was no sequential basis, but did have a coincidental causation to each of the images.
Razah on the otherhand, wrote simply, and did not seek to go over the top with his approach or line limits. There were some questionable statements "lust with the silence" doesn't sound too logical. I get what your trying to convey, but the actual sexual sentiment/ feeling, does not mesh well together with that which is a sensory experience of the ear, lust is a feeling of the sexual or heart organ. Desire would have been a better word. Lust has specific implications, desire has broader polysemic implications.
Vote: Razah
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