Adverse, solid verse man. I really enjoyed the twist at the end. It seemed like a typical story about a boxing match, but the way you threw emotions as your opponents, that was cool. Solid verse, I felt the rhyming could've been a bit better in certain parts, but I'm starting to become a fan of your story telling. It's not mind blowing per say, I just enjoy it because it's something that's not really my forte. Good shit though.
PS: Using an opponent's name in the verse as a little 'sneak diss' is my thing, you biter.
Breathless, I'm not sure how I feel about the verse. I didn't dislike it, but I really didn't like it either. Hmm. I don't know what it is that's rubbing me the wrong way. Maybe it's the rhythym I got from the piece?
I dunno, really couldn't tell you. I liked how it was different from the last verse I read from you, rhyming wise, and how it was broken down into a pair of couplets, that made the read very smooth, but still... there's something about it that really didn't make it stand out for me. With that being said, Im'a have to give this to Adverse for the more enjoyable read.
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