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Old 05-19-2016, 01:02 AM   #8
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Not too impressed with this battle, to be honest.

Innovator had a very poetic approach in my eyes. I enjoyed certain wording that lead to great imagery, but besides that, it was just a decent verse. Sorry for being short on this, but it was a short verse & left me wanting more in all aspects.

Adonis, also had a poetic approach. The real short lines made for a quick / smooth read. I'm confused about the whole Mars situation, but maybe I'm just stupid, who knows. Not one of your best verses, but it was a tad bit better than Inno's if you ask me. I'm pretty sure it was the smaller amount of syllables per line that made for a smooth read.

*shrugs, Im'a gonna have to go with Adonis just because it read better.

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