[Mr. J]

Razah, the vivid detail is usually what carries your work
the small spurts of lyrical content are the foundation of your verse.
the vibe I was getting off of this was different from your usual lines
it seems like you crafted this with timid touches, oh your beautiful mind.
the start of the verse is what really sets the tone for the end.
the small details are very thought provoking once read upon again.
there isnt much else I could say....this is a flawless verse from you...
nice work....

time, your ability to play with the abstract is commendable
when you first started you were wily, now you are more sensible.
your word choices & ability to keep your flow restricted is dope
it seems like this is 4 pieces in one because the differences show.
the miles proof line felt like an odd concept to me & it hurt you.
monocles are for one eye, bifocals would have worked full circle.
the lose sight section suffered from trying to keep a constant rhyme
perhaps you were trying to hard & this all just came of awkward right..?
perhaps you wanted to focus on the monocular with your pirate eyes
reading through it again it makes sense upon first read youd need a private eye...
ya know...either way I feel that section had suffered the most
regardless I enjoyed the idea at first but it suffers when under the scope...

v/Razah, I thought Razah brought a stronger concept this time around
his flow was flawless & the route he took with his rhyming...wow...
timeless has been going more abstract as of late & its worked so far.
but I feel he went off the deep end after I had to pick his verse apart.
I understand the general idea but it didnt really mesh with the topic well
the foundation of his verse was cool but then his concepts fell...flat...
Im giving this one to Razah for being more thorough...
thats all I gotta say about that...