Tight.
J- yours has a kind of aggressive freestyle vibe speciall towards the end of it. i like the 2nd half better than first half. but take it in stride, dont mean the first parts bad. good stuff again
Geno- our resident comma expert. you have a way of illustrating your flow in a nice simple manner, even if the words n rhymes are complex.
Thats a good thing,, some powerful thoughts and rhymes in this verse. you successfully conveyed some 'figurative urgency' with the content.
good works
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