I know everyone is saying Witty's verse is a "no show verse" and he even admitted himself it was just a keystyle, and everyone is praising Jeso for having a complete product but i'm going to have to go against the grain here.
Witty, I thought the story you told was short but also sweet. I read each line and could vision it in my head, it read more like a poem than a hip hop verse, it was very fluid from each line to the next, the overall topic was dope, and I think it's something we can all relate to, the pursuit of happiness and what not.
Jesodist, you're not bad at rhyming man, but I think you overkill it with multis, sure multi-syllable rhyming is good and can really piece a verse together, but it can also destroy a piece. There's just too many unnecessary rhymes in here to tell a coherent story, I think you should focus more on your plot elements, vocab and just your descriptions rather than your rhymes, we know you can rhyme but this is a topical league, so I think if you worked out those kinks you'd be a lot better off.
Overall, Witty told the better story in my eyes, might have been short and simple but it really served its purpose and was good enough to win here.
V/Witty
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