NYC, using solipsism as an entry was dope. My two cents if this were a Frank vote. Beautiful language as always to win over most that read, in such short length that only a few of us could attain how damaging it could be to an opponent. Enjoyed this through and through, haveno qualms really.
Breathless, smooth start, profession invalid. Notably forced wordplay sticks out like a sore dick, bringing your authors voice to a minimum getting shot at on Normandy by myself and a few others probably. I get your approach, it just didn't work. Your timing was crucial here obviously, but still I appreciate the effort to show and actually compile a verse worth of thoughts even if they were fried from the get-go.
V. Nyc
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