I really liked Adonis flip on the topic, which I don't think anyone saw coming, my only problem with your verse is it felt a bit bare bones in some places, the concept was far from bad and you put the story together well, I don't know it just felt lacking. It's on the tip of my tongue, but I can't grasp it, i'll let you know if I figure it out.
Mr. J wrote probably the best verse i've seen of his while being in the AOWL, very well told story, the multis strung everything together very nicely and it just all felt like reading a Fast and Furious scene, pretty cool story, overall very good verse and it felt like I was in Mark's shoes.
Overall, both of you guys came really nice this week and both had real dope topics, I got Mr. J taking this just by a little though because I found his verse a little bit more enjoyable, I respect you both and the effort you put forth this week, great job.
V/Mr. J
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