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Old 05-12-2016, 12:52 PM   #5
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NYC overpowered breathless in terms of scope and technique. Breathless your tale was already mundane in its theme. This is not a problem since it can add an element of resonance with the reader. However, if one doesn't add anything to build it up from the same tale we come to expect, then it becomes trite and unappealing. NYC while not his most magnificent rendition, it still was fairly enjoyable. I mean I don't think he gave it his all, but even at whatever percent he can still write a very formidable piece.

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