[Mr. J]

NYC, I thought you flipped the topic very nicely
the way you set it up made the outcome seem very unlikely
you put together a very descriptive tale & smooth read
I would have never thought of such & idea & you executed it beautifully
the flow throughout was great with the multi use as well
the ending was great & the addition of the topic improved the tale
really enjoyable read.

breathless, I see you with your tales revolving around highs.
the dialogue with the pic made me feel odd, it didnt sound right.
aside from that delicate detail you craft a story that makes sense
the feeling of defeat & the need to separate from life at the days end
squeezing in your topic in the first portion felt like a good beginning
I thought you would have touched on it more upon reaching the ending
unfortunately I did not see too much focus brought forth after that
although I applaud your storyline & your drug induced aftermath.
the flow was pretty smooth for the most part & seemed to work well
the use of the dot dot dot could have been tightened but oh well...
nice work regardless...

v/I enjoyed both pieces due to their differences
NYC took it in a direction with some great instances
the wording was crisp & the multi usage was on point
while breathless took us down a road we have all enjoyed
I recall nights when a buddy of mine would FB his dealers
& with the development involved it felt so much realer...
the clashing of styles gets better with each battle I read
but I think that NYC took this attacking the topic with accuracy
he brought a fully loaded piece surrounding the use of purple rain
while breathless barely shed light on the subject, that hurt me mayne.
your piece was dope, but NYC came correct in the first few lines
if you dont watch out for what NYC can do....hes going to rob you blind.


v/nyc