breathless, I thought this was a pretty dope verse brah.
kind of Kid Cudi ish how you use some of your words huh?
at least thats what I kind of felt while reading this beau
I can almost feel the anxiety exhuming from this too...
the flow was different but the whole thing rode out nicely.
a few lines can be shortened or cut but you hold it down...
I like these wrap around rhymes you do, nice work...
Frank, All Night diner....stay up just sounds like a goof
the headline for that place would say 3 viagra per soup.
otherwise you continue to impress with your scheme of choice
you kind of hoard each word & use them to seal the void.
but see dawg you going to stumble due to that OCD urge.
either way between each line is something nice once closely observed
you have cut down on content in these recent weeks...
must be getting your water legs back, this piece has a decent theme.
v/This is kind of tough due to the difference in styles
breathless came soft at first & in the next instant was wild...
I enjoyed it, it wasnt watered down by the editing...
it showcased its natural structure & how the setting is.
a trip down the subconscious that bothers us oh so much.
a wonderful tale came from Frank (hey pal...no show much?)
either way I thought aside from a few hiccups Frank delivered
a few rookie mistakes but you are far beyond a ranked beginner
the long distance relationship & the shout out to the hobbits hurt you
Im going to have to lean towards breathless piece, praise Steve Urkel
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