Asylum, I really enjoyed the whole vibe that you brought forth
a couple slip ups at first but you eventually got the piece on course
I felt the abrupt ending could have been worked in slightly better
your approach is cool but it needed a proper ending thats nicely centered.
yours just didnt feel like it had the proper feel for the emotional beginning.
although I do know time was an issue & this was cool for a quick penning
after the 4th line up until the 10th you had me vibing bruh.
I would have preferred a different end but you know how to light it up...
NYC, your descriptive style is as detailed as usual.
I enjoyed the build up from the beginning & the view used.
you bring your characters to life & give them a world.
the ending was cool, the flow was sick up until blur...
I finished the time machine recently so this was a cool read
the quick flashes through time is the amazing beauty
pretty dope....no complaints....
v/NYC, I think his verse left me wanting to read more.
the flow & the plot worked well together, word to Seymour.
asylum by the skin of your lip you could have had this.
but not focusing on that ending of yours is unnecessary madness.
the verse could use some trimming up but whatevs.
NYC had an all around game that worked when they bumped heads.
nice battle fellas
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