Adonis, you've got those good soothsayer instincts. Wasn't really a fan of this one though, mainly because you didn't mention if it was a police station or train station. Threw me off on the first read. The rhyming was okay, nothing really stimulating conceptually. I'm sure you needed a warm up for more thorough odes.
Razah - You're a natural at rhyming, something you could be harnessing a lot more than you are presently. Cool read, content was a bit 'regular' but that's because I usually take an unorthodox approach to reading and analyzing, as in you chose phrases and sentences that are customary and didn't break from the norm, persay.
Vote - Razah
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