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Old 05-04-2016, 09:47 PM   #6
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Breathless, the flow on this was probably the best part to me. It read very smoothly, although I wasn't a fan of aligning everything to the left. Still, a very enjoyable read. I got a spoken word / poetic vibe, and I haven't gotten that kind of vibe with a verse that flowed well in a good minute. Appreciate the read.

Frank, probably read like a handful of your verses. Sometimes I wonder what your writing process is like.. I enjoy the technicality of it, but I don't always enjoy the story told and words you chose. Evaporated hiker? Yeah.. Rhyming was cool as always, just wasn't too big on the story this time around.

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