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Old 05-04-2016, 08:02 PM   #7
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Adonis moments of dope wording but pales in comparison to your last verse JMO that shit was hot. Xena warrior ode, Ok I got u but I think it lacked a certain clarity and structure which is typically present when you bring better focus and effort to the table.

Razah shit was cool I thought it got a little bit saccharine and cloying. IMO it would've worked better if it was more of an ode to your woman or some similar fantasy, but what you had worked pretty well. I was feeling it and I especially liked the juxtaposition you create where she's your light and joy and you're sort of a darker element being shined upon. Thought you did enough to take this, it was coherent and manageable.

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