Cool battle here, two very different takes on the topic.
Asylum
I dug the first 3/4 of the verse, it felt very personal and genuine to me. My problem is the pacing, it felt like it didn't really develop the topic. It felt like you were starting to build up, and then it just ended abruptly. I kinda see where you were going with it, but the ending didn't really work for me.
NYC
Another cool read from you. This doesn't feel quite as tight as the piece you dropped last week, but it's a solid piece nonetheless. Thought you flipped the topic in a cool way and pulled it off nicely. Also thought the racial juxtaposition was rather poignant. Enjoyed it.
I got NYC taking this one with a better overall development of the subject of his piece. Cool from both, but NYC takes it.
v/ NYCSPITZ
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