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Old 04-27-2016, 03:08 AM   #5
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Sym, I enjoyed the start of your piece due to its smoothness
then I reached the end of the first portion & its almost like music...
the exists/relive idea was so nice that Im going to let it slide
you make up for it in the second half & allow yourself to let perfection ride.
I really enjoyed the style you use it reminds me of some old heads
really dope work here brah, I honestly feel so blessed...

Asy, I thought this was a great piece on your behalf
you show so much with the perfect pacing that its mad...
I thought the vibe you brought set the overall tone.
you painted an interesting picture within your raw flow
about a few lines in the second half you stumbled a bit
but you were able to squeeze an inner up to the slip.
a perfect display from you, you get more impressive each week
this was more out of your comfort zone & it has pleased me.

v/Asylum, I thought both did a bang up job to be honest
but where symetrik fumbled, asylum pushed through the gauntlet
you showcased his ability to remain a true contender in the weeks to come
symetrik is also making an impressive race to soon reach the throne.
I feel if he did some extra editing he may have bested his opponent
unfortunately asylum is a horse with more endurance & focus.
therefore I feel he has completed his duties to advance...
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