just write - some of the imagery came off... trying to be too polished? not sure. just struck me as weird in some places. my type of content though.
timeless - not a fan. I don't know how y'all flow in your heads but this didn't work for me no matter how slow I went. caught back onto the topic at the end (and all topics are up to interpretation) but I just feel like you weren't on topic for most of it. again, interpretation.
mvgt - just write
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