Just Write..
Just swell... Flowery words with great pacing, sensational story telling. Spot on. Digestible mush. How a 6'5 ex marine can write with such refinement and feeling is applaudable. Each paragraph read like the start of another chapter. The stanzas were outlined effectively transitioning the storyline from one point to the next. Very thematic and thought out in the structure sense. Calculated aapproach. Poem could get the panties wet. It was adorable. It definitely had the aww factor. Know your audience though, Niggaz ain't tryna read that shit.
Timeless...
Dope witnessing you elevate. You are leaps and bounds better. I enjoyed this abstract timeless pendulum swaying verse. 10-12 lines off from being a big body verse, but the ... at the beginning made up for it, sorta.
MVGT Just Write
Utilized the topic more efficiently
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