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I was feeling the piece by JW I just prefer to read more masculine material from men. Hope this isn't based on a true story cuz then I would really feel like a piece of shit, but mostly our essence is creation and action. That is our urge and it impels us to freedom. Love is cool but it's more the feminine essence IMO and that was 2/3rds of your verse...overkill. I would have liked this piece if Jane Austen wrote it. I liked your visuals toward the end, clenching the desk etc:

Now it's just stale air and tv dinners late at night, minus the movie
I don't know why but it seems these nights have consumed me
I need something to soothe me.... crying, hands gripping the desk
How do I put into words how my hearts been ripped through my chest?
If you were here right now you'd tell me "it's ok, give it a rest,
Take a break, the words will come to you if you just give it a sec..."
God you were the best... and the only one to fully understand me
I just wish there was a way for me to cope, besides all this brandy..
But as I look to the heavens I'm happy, knowing you live where the stars meet
And until the day i join you, I'll still love you, with every single heartbeat.

Nice. I just thought the beginning part was kind of gay to be honest. Eskimo kisses? High school romance imagery, just not my cup of tea. You are a good writer just not feeling the content, I would have maybe liked it if you used omniscient narration. Personal preference. If this was based on a true story I would view it in a completely different light.

Timeless did enough to take this imo. Depth, wording, rhymes on point. Was feeling some of the references like helter skelter was cool. Good shit. Props to both writers.

V/timeless