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Sykonaut · 04-19-2016, 01:45 PM

No no no, I didn't get that impression. But I'm far enough removed from writing this that I can look at it and know it has flaws. I wrote this to my ex wife on the day that would've been our anniversary I was too emotional to really care about it structure wise. But reading it recently I kind of liked it and already planned a re work, just wanted some constructive feed back,
@Pharaohs Army does this look better to you,

Leaning on a broken crutch tryna regain my composure
Believing if I open up I'll be paid by some closure

Had to keep the second some but I got rid of the first.

04-19-2016, 01:45 PM	#5
Sykonaut Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2016 Posts: 6 Rep Power: 0	No no no, I didn't get that impression. But I'm far enough removed from writing this that I can look at it and know it has flaws. I wrote this to my ex wife on the day that would've been our anniversary I was too emotional to really care about it structure wise. But reading it recently I kind of liked it and already planned a re work, just wanted some constructive feed back, @Pharaohs Army does this look better to you, Leaning on a broken crutch tryna regain my composure Believing if I open up I'll be paid by some closure Had to keep the second some but I got rid of the first.