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Old 04-19-2016, 01:35 PM   #6
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JW, really solid piece, a well crafted telling of the classic meet/live/lose love story. Where the take on the topic lacked creatively, the word weavery more than made up for it. I feel like, being that the plot's not being the wow factor, had you focused more on crazy multis and flow this could've been a winner

Timeless - I enjoyed where you took the topic. The way in which you told the story reminds me of trying to tell a mundane series of events while peaking on mushrooms, with less sweat and colors, in a good way. The lyrical aspects were heavy yet not forced, a hard feat to pull off while actually talking about something specific.

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