Feel like adverse had a more complete story. And more coherent cohesive
Writing. Although breathless shows some flashes of dope ish. Second battle
I read where one verse had so much potential....but. Feel like breathless fell victim
To too many possibilities and in the end what was showcased came out jumble of
Scatter brained.
Adverse I didn't really like some of your stuff in here
Like the yawn scheming line. Tbh the entire first half was decent. I might be off just felt
Like you waisted a lot of time describing and not enough time developing the character.
Dope ish though. Your certain have the skills to go far in this league.
Vote. Adverse for a more complete story.
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