Innovator, I thought this was a great idea for a verse.
it works on so many levels that its almost absurd.
you have a knack for being poetic and keen on wording
I love how the water balances out the concrete observance
the joy of poetry is you get to play with a lot of metaphors
so I applaud your showing for having the better course.
its so fluid that I never felt bored & enjoyed the switch ups
I wish you added more, you certainly had the time....
but this was sick bruh...
JESO, I feel like you got off to a real cool start..
but after neurosurgeon you kind of threw me off
the sad part is I started reading this in DOOMs voice
now I consider my favorite artist to be ruined boy...
I understood what you are working with as a writer
you want to put yourself out there as a nice rhymer
which is cool & anyone could applaud the efforts.
An art museum, the mountains, fountains & other endeavors...
that just seems done for the sake of rhyming.
I mean its an interesting story about chart climbing
raw science, jaw splices on top of Gods primus
watching a logs climate but what does it mean?
v/Inno, although I felt that JESODIST had some cool ideas
I just feel that it wasnt put together well, word to IKEA
some of the concepts would have made more sense if broken apart
but I feel with the simple approach Inno has stolen my heart
the poetic vibe just works on so many levels its ridiculous
even if JESODIST came through rhyming with vigor its....
well its a easy decision on my behalf....nice battle...
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