At best I can ALMOST quote the origin wp as being ok. And almost the "taking credit" bar, but that's more of a personal preference bc sometime I like a direct, no flip/wp/nameplay type attack to add diversity to the verse.
Orcs first 3 bars were ehhhh to me. Tbh. The middle 2 bars are eluding to this guy having a big ass nose I'm guessing. Idk bc idk what he looks like so that kinda took some of the sting off. But the shark-fin-nose angle bar itself was worded well and connected. Good shit. The closer was eh.
Lackluster battle tbh but shit happens.
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