[Mr. J]

For a first go in a long time I enjoy the build up of the long lines
of course some of the wording is off & may come at the wrong time
but its poetic & raw like...the flow presents itself as a calm tide...
then it carries on like a different style together, one I havent seen in a long time
regardless I thought you broke down the vibe of the character you chose
you used some nice wording that also helped in the carrying of your prose
pretty smooth work for this return of yours
as the weeks progress I think you might turn your course
keep up the good work fellow competitor