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Old 04-15-2016, 04:06 PM   #12
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its a great letter piece and the style is really what drives it..
maybe I should have went the same route the piece that I did
I E the newspaper article, but this was pretty smooth to the end
hopefully your return will help influence our friends..
the whole paragraph style has disappeared in most recent days
I thought it brought a balance to the OM & reading this is great
you put the reader in the antagonists shoes & it works
I would break it down with some quoted inserts.
but I feel it takes away from the whole *vibe* of the piece
tbh the whole battle to topical is something nice to see...
you better show this week right @Adonis
you make the cut like scissors...lesbihonest
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