Jesodist... you really do have a good use of your vocab and descriptive language, but I almost feel like you focus too much on trying to build multisyllabic, complex rhymes and that lose out on some of the other elements that make for a dope piece. You've definitely got skills, and keep doin' it, but maybe try focusing your efforts more on another aspect of writing. And trust me, I get the love for complex rhyming, i'm a sucker for it myself.
Adverse... really cool read. You know how to tell a story, you built it up and ended it smoothly. Wording was good, read nice and easy. Nice little twist with the way you wrapped up the 'richness isn't wealth' subject, definitely gave the piece that last little boost of emotion that made it rich itself. Welcome to the league.
v/ Adverse
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