MVGT Asylum
Not a fan of submissions under 16 lines. Recently they've become a fad? There is a certain stigma surrounding these short verses, which I am not completely understanding of. 16 bar verses are for audio tracks, they have no place in the AOWL. This was a great battle, though. I was impressed with Mr Js minimalist style, but was disheartened by the added visual aid. Asylum was flawless for the modt part. Probably his strongest writing to date, imho. Asylum has trouble ending emphatically, he merely tacks on ending lines that do not come off as conclusive enough to elevate his writing to that next level - Well on the way, though. Giving him the nod over Mr. J this week.
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