Really interesting battle here... Mr. J went for a really cool flip on the topic, whereas Asylum went bananas with the flow and schemes, and imagery.
Mr. J... you took the topic and spun it in a very creative way... after my first read through, i immediately read the verse again and noticed all the subtle ways you built up to it... really a cool read. On the technical side you didn't go for anything extravagant, but it was cool throughout.
Asylum, you went bonkers with the technicality on this one. Flow, mutlis, inners, vivid imagery, vocab... it was dense. And, I think that might have been your downfall. It was so dense and abstract it's hard to see a through-line that connects everything back to your take on the topic. Had Mr. J not taken such a cool twist on the topic, I think you might've gotten my vote for the technical prowess of your verse. But, as it stands...
v/ Mr. J
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