adverse's piece
hawt
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The owner of the company, white suit shined like a beacon from heaven
A smile hellbent on showing each of the pearly teeth that he was blessed with
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maybe a little rephrasing but solid.
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....And that's what I didn't tell you, I hope you see it now my friend
I just hope death could grant me something money couldn't...A chance to be with her again..."
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nailed this ending.
nawt
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Standing at the front desk, poised at the entrance of the palace
The same station I had my first encounter with Mr. Braxton
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just don't like the rhyme.
jesodist's piece
hawt
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A slick lyrical sniper, hits well Focused with Precision,
Destructing Cyphers Sick Cinical liars willingly Come for a Prescription,
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it's SO close to there. if you had worded this right, it would have been dope.
nawt
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Not even the sun could handle the Heat that he Bring,
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mvgt: adverse making me read, ugh. much more solid piece on the topic, and great story.