artifice's piece
hawt
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Rick & Steve need a bus ride, Zack comes by the back of a Benz
3 kids arrive in grade 9 but Zack's from a way higher class than them
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RICK THIS ISN'T A GOOD IDEA RICK. no but really, loved the flow of this.
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now Steve's a blue collar kid who fully knew what his father did
saw the footsteps that the soot left & yet was still choosin' to follow it
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greatness takes different paths, Rick was born a gifted polymath
Steve was born poor but working class morals taught him to give it all he had
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nawt
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a tale from a Robin William's quote begins with paraphrasin' it
one's born great, one achieves it... one receives it as a graduation gift
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just didn't add to the piece for me.
razah's piece
hawt
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I deserve the things I have & now I cherish what I'm worth
Great is where I start- I won't stop until I'm buried in the dirt
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honestly had a hard time liking this piece, but this line was /really/ nice in my opinion.
nawt
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I made it on my lonesome, it made me feel so calm
If life's a game I crushed it, I have greatness in my palm
Heard 'em say I don't deserve it, they could suck my fucking dick
All the stress that I've been through, ya'll could never stomach it
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mvgt: artifice for a much more coherent, on topic piece