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Old 04-11-2016, 07:15 PM   #10
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would've like to see Smirk match with 10lines instead of 8....

not overly impressed with either verse but V/Smirk by a small margin

habitat:
Or maybe I'll show respect and be the only attendee at ur funeral- no tears
Perhaps u'd like ur casket closed, caption reading<- n/m it'll just fall on deaf ears

I like this one. Most of the other punches are decent, but I think you can def improve your set-ups.. they seem a lil' weak.
Good rhyming throughout most of it, which turns me off to your closer, because I don't see how it rhymes. The content of the closer also fell short I feel. Thought it was the weakest part to end on it,

smirk:
nothing too special but your closer was better than your opponent's. factored in to my vote

be on the floor gettin kicked if u try n mess wi the champs camp
have tat on his lower back in pain, call that applying a tramp stamp

pretty cool rhyming/wordplay

You are lucky to get this vote with an (allegedly)key'd 8bar verse. Don't expect a win with this kind of effort next time.

Just thought Smirk's were more straightforward punches
And Habitat's, employed some good rhyming and decent punches but most set-ups seemed weak to me
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